Stupid Game Advertising

Saw an advertisement for Lord of Ultima on Origin. Clicked it, then was blasted in the face with the image of a guy in platemail with an axe (which was cool enough).... and two women in summer dresses that did not in any way match the rest of the image.

Goddamnit gaming industry. Goddamnit.  It's almost like gaming advertising for these "free to play" strategy games has only five images of women in total.

Making writing that isn't wordy

As a bit of a condolence to the few poor, miserable souls who actually visit this place (assuming that number is above zero, which is not a safe assumption), I've been sort of sitting on the next parts of my story for some time now.  The main worry I have is that, well, they're too wordy.  There's a lot of personality bits, exposition, and dialogue in the story at this point.  I'm trying to figure out what exactly I should do to reduce the level of dialogue... show, rather than tell.

So... I have two options.  I'm deciding whether or not to post what I have and ask for feedback, or just go and try to re-write it entirely.  If anyone visits this place, feel free to leave your opinion on the topic.