As a bit of a condolence to the few poor, miserable souls who actually visit this place (assuming that number is above zero, which is not a safe assumption), I've been sort of sitting on the next parts of my story for some time now. The main worry I have is that, well, they're too wordy. There's a lot of personality bits, exposition, and dialogue in the story at this point. I'm trying to figure out what exactly I should do to reduce the level of dialogue... show, rather than tell.
So... I have two options. I'm deciding whether or not to post what I have and ask for feedback, or just go and try to re-write it entirely. If anyone visits this place, feel free to leave your opinion on the topic.